I know for some reason on every site I've ever been on that it is only ever customary for comments on stories to be positive and appreciative of the story, closest I can come is to suggest reading your own work before you post it because if you only ever read comments telling you how hot it is and asking you to write more your work will just get sloppier, an odd typo can be excused like continually calling "Sam" "same" and putting the wrong character name but you've contradicted yourself and the timeline a couple of times too, others might think i'm being petty but we don't all read with our dick in our hand. if on the other-hand you are trying to write it as an immature 20yr old who has only a basic education then well done, you're very convincing.
keep writing, the more you write the better you should get, as long as you take all that glowing praise with a pinch of salt, they are obviously easily impressed and could even believe fairy stories about 2000 mile long walls too?
