What makes a good sex story?

[MyNameIsGreg]

Hi,

I'm thinking about writing a few sex stories and was wondering what you all thought about stories you have read in the past; what made them good/bad, was there anything it lacked or anything it had to much off etc.

Thanks

[Guest FinalDL2021]

I think stories that are true, seem to be the best. If you have had experiences write about that; there is nothing wrong with embellishing a little, but don't go overboard.

[gwmxyz]

Agree with PozTemptation - credibility.  If you can't believe it happened you might as well read sci-fi to get hard. 

Nothing too far fetched - and put in the little details you remember (or would remember if you hadn't made it up). 

[ErosWired]

A good sex story is, first, a story. Stories are built out of characters driven to enact a plot by their circumstances, their human qualities such as strengths and weaknesses,  and the wualities of the place in which the story occurs, i.e., the setting. By resolving the conflict generated by the differences berween all these qualities, we derive the theme of the work. (Full disclosure: Sometimes I’m asked to teach fiction writing workshops.)

Of course, the average sex story isn’t The Grapes of Wrath, and isn’t meant to be. But applying a few points of good mainstream fiction wtiting will elevate your work above the sea of sordid dreck soaking the web. I recommend you go to the libraty or bookstore and find a good introductory guide to fiction writing.

The story, however, is in this case just the framework upon which you drape the titillating layers of smut and debauchery your readers crave. Try to exercise restraint. Sometimes less is more; every story need not showcase your comprehensive knowledge of synonyms for “penis”. On the other hand, a little creative metaphor and simile can take you a long way. Instead of writing a tiref old phrase like:

He reamed Jimmy’s toned young ass with long, hard thrusts of his steel-hard rod

instead try something like:

He fucked Jimmy like one of Napoleon’s fusiliers ramming a steel-handled swab down the bore of a brass cannon with a stubborn blockage he was determined to conquer - and he wasn’t going to stop until he did.

Poor Jimmy... there’s got to be a story behind that Top’s determination to break Jimmy down sexually, and the visual helps the reader better understand the Top’s motivattions.

But this is way too big a topic to be adequately addressed in a thread, so get a book and study up on the craft.

[barecubtop]

1 hour ago, ErosWired said:

instead try something like:

He fucked Jimmy like one of Napoleon’s fusiliers ramming a steel-handled swab down the bore of a brass cannon with a stubborn blockage he was determined to conquer - and he wasn’t going to stop until he did.

That's quite a sentence. 

With that in mind, remember your audience too.  As beautiful as ErosWired's sentence may be, a story full of sentences like that will likely cause some readers to give up if they don't understand the metaphors or language.  I wouldn't write a sex story in the same way I write my academic (math) papers.  I often find that I'm too wordy in some of my "last load" posts on here and have to edit several times before I finally push the submit button so that it's short and concise enough to get the point across. 

[Guest Memphian]

On 9/13/2018 at 11:29 AM, MyNameIsGreg said:

Hi,

I'm thinking about writing a few sex stories and was wondering what you all thought about stories you have read in the past; what made them good/bad, was there anything it lacked or anything it had to much off etc.

Thanks

I'm trying to think of some advice but that's a pretty broad question.  Like, "I'm thinking of cooking dinner, what should I do and what should I avoid?"  (I'm not trying to be a dick, in fact I'm stoned which makes me very affable.)

I don't know what to tell you.  When you said "stories" and I took that to mean fiction.  I don't have any advice for that but if you meant true stories, then I agree with what someone else posted- keep it real.  That's what I love about sites like this where I'm pretty anonymous.  I can be honest with no repercussions and that's impossible in real life.  So for that reason, I don't ever make shit up when I'm posting here or on other boards.  

 

[Guest BtmByTheBay]

What makes a story good? I'm a professional writer, so hopefully my PoV will be useful:

Detail, Believability, and Duration

You need to be able to tell your story with enough detail to set the scene and describe what is happening, but not so much that you bog down the reader. It's okay to have some good details ("when I finally pulled off his shorts, his cock sprang up, all eight inches of it, thick, and hard, and the head already sheened with his precum"), just as long as you don't get caught up in them. ("He bent over on the bed and I got a good look at his ass. He was about six feet tall, but you wouldn't think it the way he lay on the bed before me. I noticed he had a trail of hair down his spine at around his lower back and rear, and some of the hairs were red, some were brown, some were golden, some were black. He had hair on his legs too," etc etc ad nauseam)

Unless the detail is relevant to the story you're telling, skip it

You need to tell a believable story, too. Like others say, it's okay to embellish details a little, but if it's too outlandish, then it just becomes either comical (unless that's your intent) or just plain hard to believe, and thus throws the story out of the realm of believability and enjoyability. If you had a hot hookup, and the guy's friends joined in, awesome. If it turned into a six-way gangbang with you as the bottom and you were tied up in the back yard and fucked in a sling while everyone cheered you on and you took all the cocks and they were all huge and so on and so forth, it becomes a diet of frosting. Overwhelming, bland, and ultimately not all that filling.

You also need it to be, well, long enough. A short story is an anecdote. "I once got fucked in a sling, and I'd like to do that again." A long story? Either cut it shorter, or focus only on the high points, or if you want to tell a long story, break it up into sub narratives or chapters, and even each sentence or paragraph should draw the reader in further, letting them wonder, "okay, and what happened next?!" as they move from point to point in the narrative.

Ultimately, the object of any story is for entertainment, to catch the imagination of the reader, and leave them both satiated, and wondering "Well then, that was hot, I wonder where it could go from there?"

 

Edited September 15, 2018 by BtmByTheBay

[ErosWired]

On 9/14/2018 at 9:05 PM, barecubtop said:

That's quite a sentence. 

You make an excellent point, and you’re quite right about being aware of the reader - to an extent. On the other hand, just because every man’s basic need is food doesn’t mean we have to serve a peanut butter sandwich instead of a pot roast.

I readily confess I tend to be guilty of constructing dense sentences, however, so in deference to your point I’ll amend it thus:

He fucked Jimmy like one of Napoleon’s fusiliers ramming a steel-handled swab down the bore of a brass cannon as though all of France depended on it.

(I was sorely tempted to add while whistling ‘La Marseillaise’ to the end, but let brevity win the day.)

[Guest BBBoyfromTN]

True stories that sound realistic. Too many sound like they’re trying to “write porn” and sound phony or use stilted or weird action and language. Reading the, turns me off because I’ve never heard a guy say or do any of that except in pornos and they’re so contrived and fake it’s a total turn off. I love amateur porn because it’s more natural....makes it crazy hot. There’s so much dialogue in some porn and honestly...when I’m getting my freak on there’s not that much talking. 

[funpozbottom]

BtmByTheBay has really good advise. 

Just to throw in my two cents (which in today's economy is worth about half a penny,) this is sort of my writing process. When I write a story, I'll ask myself two questions. As I develop an outline for the story, I ask myself that annoying question that every 2 year old continually asks about everything: "Why?"  I ask myself why are they there, why are they doing that, and why did that happen? That's my way of fleshing out details and developing a back story for the events I'm writing about.  Once the story is written, I edit by asking myself the second question: "Is this necessary to the telling of the story."  If it's not necessary, or impedes the flow of the story, I take it out. This takes out the fat and helps prevent it from being too long and wordy. Sometimes those stray bits I've removed can be worked into another story so I don't worry about the effort of writing them going to waste. Finally, I read it again to search for typos, missing words or sentence fragments. (This third step is important because as you write, there is a tendency to anticipate what you intend to write, which makes it easy to skip over errors without seeing them.)  Once I'm happy with the story, all that's left to do is upload it and go out and get fucked to celebrate.

 

[Acehole]

On 9/15/2018 at 7:27 AM, BtmByTheBay said:

What makes a story good? I'm a professional writer, so hopefully my PoV will be useful:

Detail, Believability, and Duration

You need to be able to tell your story with enough detail to set the scene and describe what is happening, but not so much that you bog down the reader. It's okay to have some good details ("when I finally pulled off his shorts, his cock sprang up, all eight inches of it, thick, and hard, and the head already sheened with his precum"), just as long as you don't get caught up in them. ("He bent over on the bed and I got a good look at his ass. He was about six feet tall, but you wouldn't think it the way he lay on the bed before me. I noticed he had a trail of hair down his spine at around his lower back and rear, and some of the hairs were red, some were brown, some were golden, some were black. He had hair on his legs too," etc etc ad nauseam)

Unless the detail is relevant to the story you're telling, skip it https://assets.s3xstatic.com/bz/uploads/emoticons/default_smile.png

You need to tell a believable story, too. Like others say, it's okay to embellish details a little, but if it's too outlandish, then it just becomes either comical (unless that's your intent) or just plain hard to believe, and thus throws the story out of the realm of believability and enjoyability. If you had a hot hookup, and the guy's friends joined in, awesome. If it turned into a six-way gangbang with you as the bottom and you were tied up in the back yard and fucked in a sling while everyone cheered you on and you took all the cocks and they were all huge and so on and so forth, it becomes a diet of frosting. Overwhelming, bland, and ultimately not all that filling.

You also need it to be, well, long enough. A short story is an anecdote. "I once got fucked in a sling, and I'd like to do that again." A long story? Either cut it shorter, or focus only on the high points, or if you want to tell a long story, break it up into sub narratives or chapters, and even each sentence or paragraph should draw the reader in further, letting them wonder, "okay, and what happened next?!" as they move from point to point in the narrative.

Ultimately, the object of any story is for entertainment, to catch the imagination of the reader, and leave them both satiated, and wondering "Well then, that was hot, I wonder where it could go from there?"

 

"and some of the hairs were red, some were brown, some were golden, some were black. He had hairs on his legs too." 

That's hot! 

[DaddyBare]

Some helpful suggestions, but it's not just a matter of technique. If you just want to write a story, then you'll end up writing the equivalent of most trashy porn films' story-lines, these are in my opinion not very hot at all! The first thing you must have is an idea. Why do you want to write a story, what is it about? It's a good start to write an embellished account of something you, yourself have experienced. That's how I started when I posted my first story: Daddy Bear's picnic. You get to learn how to write, what to include or not. Your basic idea should be simple. If you can't condense it down to a simple sentence then it's probably too complicated. This often also gives you the title for your story. Thus my idea for my last story was: If you advertise for a bareback sauna party what stops people deliberately coming to poz you? Which became: Poz Team hijack Sauna Party. The story itself may have a more complicated plot line, but having an idea means you have a goal in mind, so the story is able to develop and end satisfactorily.

Although, I agree with the sentiment of writing from experience because that gives authenticity, I believe you do need imagination. It's a story after all, so let it be a flight of fancy. Ask yourself what would turn you or perhaps others on? It may be something you'd secretly want to happen or it may be something not particulalrly your scene, but through imagination, you put yourself into the situation. This happened for me in my story "Fuck Club." I'm not into sado-masochism, but by using my imagination I was able to imagine what such a club would be like, how an initiation might progress.

Finally, you need to have intensity. If it doesn't turn you on, it probably won't turn others on either. Write about how you (the central character of the story) feels about the situation. Emotions such as fear and lust are essential to building a good story. Build up the tension, either by teasing or by putting the character into more and more awkward/dangerous situations. I managed this well in my "playing with Fire" story as the danger and desire to take poz dick grew.

The best example I know on the site of really good writing that includes all these elements, along with good writing technique is "Striaght Reporter gets pozzed": a fabulous story. Read it and others like it to help you get ideas for your own writing. I wish you well and hope to read your first story some time in the New Year.