Sacrificed
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MAster , definatly would love to become a poz pig and take as much from different people as i can get , also looking to become a slave /owned property !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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KEIRAN from eic videos and t.i.m
Sacrificed replied to lascivious_lad's topic in Bareback Porn Discussion
Is it just me or does he have KS on his back and arms in his Keiran and Nathan video for ericvideos? -
Hey bro, also into body mods, getting poz, and ritualistic shit too. Would love to chat with you, your profile got me rock fucking hard! Hit me back!
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Nice photo. I accepted your friend request. Have we chatted before? I don't remember any previous contact. You may wish to become a member of my group: Full-blown AIDS - tops.
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Just some suggestions: 1) There is a fine line between erotica and banal smut that ceases to be erotic. To avoid crossing into smut you should try to limit the amount of extraneous profanity you have in each paragraph. for instance, we know that Stone wants to knock you up and likes to 'breed bitches'. It gets kind of repetitious and needlessly profane the more (and more you repeat it). Also, most people don't enthusiastically repeat ideas like 'I want you to knock me up' without knowing what it means. The readers know what it means, but your character shouldn't and he comes across as dishonest here (which could be good in some stories, but yours is about his supposed innocence pre-Stone). 2) Don't write a character outside your own race. I can tell you are a white dude without seeing a photo. Stone is a totally racist caricature and basing his erotic appeal on that isn't sexy. 3) The conclusion of a piece of erotica often gives the reader at home their money shot by revealing info that makes clear just outside a reasonable doubt that the erotic act/scenario written about (in this case pozzing) happened so the reader can be satisfied the story is near being finished and they can cum. To be successful, no new information should be added at the end, just previously unconfirmed rumors or ideas that gave the protagonist their self-preservationist reasonable doubt. If you want to keep your ending as here, introduce the needles earlier by having them fall out of Stone's pocket (during sex would be great to give your character fear) and have Garret and the protagonist walk by Stone in the park as he's sharing needles with a junkie. If that's when your character realizes his fate, that'd be intense. You have a good sense of twisted fetish, and I hope you take these as tips from a seasoned/trained writer and not as bitchy criticisms.
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Zinc increases production of seminal and cowper's fluid, which in a day or so should give you bigger loads. But don't take more than 50mg a day.
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Learn, you know, reading comprehension.
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I didn't deny precum could carry HIV, I just said its not semen.
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Precum is not semen. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Pre-ejaculate
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Teddy Roosevelt, because the Bull Moose/Progressive Party to this day still has one of the most radically humane and leftist Platforms ever seen by this country. And standing up to oligarchs is totally hot. plus, looks like he's a stallion.
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It kind of is a real shit place to spend your last few hours in. But its also known as a place for g overdoses, so I'm not surprised. And I'd have to concur with Nastyrigpig.
