Jump to content
Gymguy8

Soccer Boy's Spiral

Recommended Posts

4 hours ago, Gymguy8 said:

Check-in

It's been about six weeks now. I feel like I didn't set myself up as well as I could have; I had a both a story arc, and I was writing two sections ahead of what I had posted. That meant any plot suggestions wouldn't have shown up for weeks, which is an eternity for what I was trying to accomplish. So, two changes for the next six to eight weeks:

  • First, I'm going to take a short break; I started another chapter in Jay's story ("On the Job Training") and want to finish that.
  • Second, I will come back to this story. But it's going to be writing "live:" I'm going to wait for feedback before I even start to move forward. I will say that the first one will include one commenter's suggestion.

Any other thoughts? Ideas? Direction?

A classic revisited. I strongly encourage that your fandom reads OTJT. This is the story that made me first appreciate how talented you are.

I'd like to see a cameraman step out of the shadows if possible. Perhaps someone who wither the Super or Conrad owes money to?

Link to post
Share on other sites
10 hours ago, Gymguy8 said:

Check-in

It's been about six weeks now. I feel like I didn't set myself up as well as I could have; I had a both a story arc, and I was writing two sections ahead of what I had posted. That meant any plot suggestions wouldn't have shown up for weeks, which is an eternity for what I was trying to accomplish. So, two changes for the next six to eight weeks:

  • First, I'm going to take a short break; I started another chapter in Jay's story ("On the Job Training") and want to finish that.
  • Second, I will come back to this story. But it's going to be writing "live:" I'm going to wait for feedback before I even start to move forward. I will say that the first one will include one commenter's suggestion.

Any other thoughts? Ideas? Direction?

Since James is tied up and blindfolded, I would like to see the story start moving towards bdsm territory, either light impact (gutpunch, tt, cbt or other impact play like spanking or whipping), or electro (maybe combined with sounding?) Obviously, fisting is another option, almost a natural progression for cumdump sluts like James!

  • Like 4
Link to post
Share on other sites

First of all thanks for your hot stories.

Well, imho since no one is forced to write a never ending story so no one would blame you if you would be so kind to add a final chapter where James accept Conrad as his master or go home happy of his new born cumdump life...

BUT...

your last chapter, the James’ surrender to Conrad looks more a new beginning that a prelude to the end.

So... I think @pitsnipspisspig is right, to shift the story toward the BDSM could be a good idea and, of course for me, Fisting should not be an option but a MUST, Fisting and all its subsequents extreme anal stretching evolutions are for me not only the natural progression of a cumdumpslut but also the best inimaginable experience in the Art of Sex. 

Of course if you want to transmit emotions to your readers you should be emotionally involved, if you haven’t had experiences with BDSM and Fisting or they aren’t part of your fantasies you could, as James did with Conrad, give the control of this story fate to someone else (not me) of your choice. To keep your story safe your designated author could write his chapter in another topic “Soccer Boy’s Spiral - The New Beginning “.

Edited by Fistcumslut
  • Like 2
Link to post
Share on other sites

I have really enjoyed the story. It has a nice pace and keeps my interest. There are so many ways you can take it. Yes, fisting is obvious. More piss play. Hot wax. It seems like James may be heading down the path to becoming a pain pig. However, early on you had him possibly getting into soft porn. Perhaps this is another path to follow. More heavy porn. He has to make some money to keep living unless your plan is to use him up and dump him in a recovery program. I like a story that stays believable. Pushing boundaries without becoming ridiculous. It’s a fine line and you seem to push it without going over it. Really looking forward to more—many more—chapters. Thanks!

  • Like 1
Link to post
Share on other sites

some people just don`t seem to be able to chill and let a guy tell a story his own way at his own pace ....... it`s a good start and am more than happy to let it spin out ...... makes it more suspenseful ........  when guys make an effort to write stories for us instead of criticism I think a little gratitude would be nice

  • Like 2
  • Upvote 2
Link to post
Share on other sites

Just in case there's any questions, there will be no more chapters in this story.

BUT, the story continues in Soccer Boy's Screen Test. "Screen Test" picks up right where "Spiral" leaves off. "Screen Test" has over ten chapters done.

Nor is James entirely done: there's at least 5 more chapters in Screen test, and he'll also soon make a special appearance in "The Party After Halloween."

 

  • Like 3
  • Thanks 1
Link to post
Share on other sites

Join the conversation

You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.

Guest
Reply to this topic...

×   Pasted as rich text.   Restore formatting

  Only 75 emoji are allowed.

×   Your link has been automatically embedded.   Display as a link instead

×   Your previous content has been restored.   Clear editor

×   You cannot paste images directly. Upload or insert images from URL.

Loading...


×
×
  • Create New...

Important Information

By using this site, you agree to our Terms of Use, Privacy Policy, and Guidelines. We have placed cookies on your device to help make this website better. You can adjust your cookie settings, otherwise we'll assume you're okay to continue.