I wanted Jake so bad; I would do anything.

[marcus1969]

this story sucked....thought he would get with Jake, but Jake was a sadistic jerk

[RawSubDad]

I want to like this story but it’s impossible to follow. Characters names change, they are regularly swapped with another character mid-fuck or bj because, I guess the author can’t keep up with the story he’s telling or simply refuses to proof read his work or ask someone to. I spend more time trying to understand who is really doing what that I find the story loses its erotic effects.
 

Writing these stories is difficult, I know, which is what makes it a shame that there is a great story here but it’s telling is so butchered that it’s ruined - in my opinion. Proofreading works. In fact it’s vital. If you can’t or won’t, find someone who can and will. 

Peace -

[Different8]

On 10/16/2022 at 8:11 PM, gapesofwrath said:

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