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I gotta admit, I didn’t know what “tintinnabulation“ meant—never heard the word before (it’s in the first paragraph of the third chapter, Page 01, dated 19 June 2020). At first I thought it was a typo, but I couldn’t figure out what word/words it might be. So I looked it up: “tintinnabulation: a ringing or tinkling sound.” Ahh! Who knew you could build your vocabulary by reading pornography?!
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I just went back to the first several chapters to be sure of this, but PHXariesAZ never even bothers with the nicety of giving the twins names! He always refers to them in general terms like “I took one twin, Chad took the other,” or, “we swapped twins.” Oh, c’mon, man! Indulge us—name the bastards! We’ll be more invested in them if they’re humanized with names! I realize, of course, that I’m pissin’ in the wind at this point. (Or pissin’ on a no-name twin, which would be more fun.) Our author’s last installment of this tale was furnished in—what?—February of 2017? Yeah, PHXariesAZ ain’t revisiting this story. Sorry, those of you who always, and endlessly, entreat for new chapters of every story. And really, at this point our Phoenix man has given us the blueprint for how any number of successive chapters would play out; all we have to do is read the last couple of chapters, lather, rinse, and repeat. That’s not a criticism—it’s the nature of porn. I think PHXariesAZ gave us a fine and well-constructed story to augment our masturbation. It amused me that those twins suffered the debasement of interchangeability. Who can bother telling twin apart anyway?
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fuck you are one hot stud!
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Aw, man, thanks! It’s kind of funny to read that comment, because I just don’t think of myself like that, if that makes sense. But I am grateful.
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“Damon's semen had an edge to it, the bodily fluid equivalent of a chip on his shoulder.“ I read that line and just thought, Whoa! Porn with a literary bent! Not only is this a thoroughly frisky story—with long, lingering sexual congress between young Jay and various parties—why, it’s very well written. Maybe even better written than some, er, mainstream (that is, more broadly read) literary endeavors I’ve slogged through. So, wherever you are, gymguy8, please know that your work continues to be effective, be it for jacking off or something more edifying.
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You’ve done a particularly amazing job with this chapter of the two brothers’ adventure, Carenath. It’s hard enough to write good porn that doesn’t wind up getting… well, kind of redundant (which is fine, everyone! just fine!). I’ve started this story before but never made it this far inland; the instructional nature of the first long chapter was certainly interesting, but for me it needed to move along at a faster clip. And one of the hosts I felt like needed to be outfitted with a gag. But this chapter! This chapter! The pace worked like a slow burn. I was shocked by how romantic and, well, loving the brothers’ relationship proved to be. Good Lord, I almost swooned! You wanna know what gets me hard? That does the trick! This tone of your story drew me in and turned me on! Who knew? I’ve read so many stories that favor mean behavior, brusque ramming, dirty talk, here-smoke-some-shit, and then—quick!—change the configuration for a subsequent chapter. There are always notable exceptions, but I started to think that all I’d ever get here would be (willing) assaults and nasty pigs. Okay, sure, I like those stories, too—just not, like, all the time. So once again, Carenath, you’ve done a knockout job on this story and particularly this chapter of the story. Thank you!
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Well, I’ve read all 10 (oh, right! Roman numerals, so “X”) chapters of your tale, wtvrfzzz, and I gotta say, I’m quite impressed. You needn’t apologize, as you did at the top of Chapter X. I mean, c’mon! This is basically porno, and you’ve actually produced something here that goes beyond formula. Now…maybe I’m thinking that way because I just read all the chapters in one sitting. And anytime you’re exposed to such a large dose of something, it makes an impression. But I’m sober, so there is that. I know everyone clamors for more chapters, more chapters! to every author (none of whom are, like, getting paid to write this stuff). But really, we know that any of these things could end without notice. It’s the nature of horniness. Well, and self-medication. Plus, it’s hard enough for really good writers to top one chapter with the next one. There are good writers here, sure, but…published? And basically, porn is repetition to begin with. That’s a long wind up to make this point: When I check in to Breeding Zone, I try to keep expectations low. So when I come across multi-part writing like yours, which holds my (sober) interest over the course of 10 chapters…well! I’m not even sure I could attempt that. You’ve entertained us with plenty of variation on the grinding formula (er, also “the formula of grinding”). Also, I know what a challenge it can be to imbue characters with their own distinctive personalities, and then to choreograph them in scenes of intercourse (both forms, sexual and conversational) —but look at you, wtvrfzzz! You’ve done a decent job of both! So I don’t care if you can furnish more chapter until Victor bites the dust, or if this is as good as it gets. I think it’s plenty good! Remember, wherever you leave it, somebody’s always gonna whine for more.
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Very similar to the earlier “Photographing Jason” (with multiple chapters), which I would recommend to readers who’ve enjoyed this one.
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How Gay Almost Died: Losing the J-Spot and the Shrink Cock War
TheAficionado replied to a topic in Chem Sex FICTION
Whew! I’ll give you this, dude, you are a totally natural storyteller. I like the way you rip through dialogue, full steam ahead, never mind worrying about whether the reader’s keeping up—that’s our problem. It’s like, if you can’t get this story out out of your system, it will explode out of you anyway. So congrats on a great romcom Chapter One, complete with title card. You done real good! -
How I Became My Baby Brother Bobby's Little Bitch
TheAficionado replied to a topic in Chem Sex FICTION
Sorry, but I seem to have lost the long-winded, although highly complimentary, version of this note. Here’s the truncated version: Your story surprised me—it was so well done for a first effort here. I like that attitude Baby Bro Bobby shows, too! Welcome to the group, BigBroAlex! -
How I Became My Baby Brother Bobby's Little Bitch
TheAficionado replied to a topic in Chem Sex FICTION
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There’s more to this topic than I originally imagined, as proven by the thoughtful response from, er, LetsPOZBreed. (It feel odd using such a bad boy screen name after reading your well-considered remarks.) I can appreciate your point, ErosWired. As I wrote, there are more aspects to the topic than I’d thought. Also, you may go back and correct your text with the nifty—pardon, useful—“Edit” tool, which you’ll see in a pull down menu under the three dots (•••) at the top of your newly posted rely. (I was so pleased when I saw that!)
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Excellent point, gwmxyz. I wasn’t aware of this issue until I ventured into the discussion. It just seems kinda slimy to demand audition photos. And as you write, it’s as if saying, Well, I dunno…if you have a better photo you might make the cut. Horsefeathers!
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Why, look at that! I can choose the sentence I wish to comment on without copying the whole ever-lovin’ essay! This may be decidedly off-point, tankonpoint, but I honestly had never seen the word “moraine” before you employed it here. Nope, not “more rain,” although we might consider the comments between chapters as a slog. The word is much better than that. “Moraine is the name for raw glacial debris, the rock that is loosened and carried by glacial ice, then deposited where the ice melts.” That’s from Keweenaw Geoheritage @ geo.mtu.edu Thank you for that sterling example of a perfectly apropos term, tankonpoint. And drscorpio, I appreciate the headache we’ve ginned up for you as moderator here, but I also read through the important rules and info rawTOP provided. I’d kinda like to try writing a story, but I don't wanna leave a mess.
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Whew! Dude, you know how to orchestrate a story. I like the way you gradually build up the intensity of the chem usage; it seems tantric compared to many other stories. Also, as with your other submissions, there’s the unexpected element of romance…even tenderness. What?! On this site? Why, yes, it’s true. And of course that element strengthens (what are essentially) naughty stories. I’m glad other readers also are taking the time to pass along praise for your work. We recognize a singular writer when we read one. I encourage you to explore whatever subject matter interests you. I have a feeling that, whatever it may be, it will interest faithful freaks as well.
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I’m with PigWest: I believe we’ve got ourselves a winner here. Lucky us!
